Overall this makes sense, but some concreteness is missing:
--If you are on the start space and roll the whirlpool face, what happens? Not specified.
--Why move counterclockwise to the next law? Since your turn order is clockwise, this could lead to confusion.
--Consider putting point 4 of "How to Play" and the green-boxed note BEFORE the Example italicized text. Reading the example, before completely understanding the process, is confusing.
--I would recommend you consider removing the Whirlpool space from the board. It does nothing but cause a sense of pointless loss.
--I did not see your prior rulebook, but this wording feels tighter.